here is a rework
3-1-2
comming here lately I like 3 over the other 2 versions.
3 (positve)
- her left arm seems much better connected
- her poses overbalance has found a counterweight in the window appearance
- the window adds a geometrical element (i like structures of order worked into scenes)
- light balance and pronounciation is better developed compared to 1 and 2
1
- left arm looks disconnected
- hair very dark (too dark for me)
- pose very interesting but not consent between body and face/head/left arm.
-- There is a tension set in the torso that does not repeat in her face,
-- There is a stiff feeling added by the hand supported on the hipp (or supporting the hipp?)
-- (I think Frank statement of 'pain' aroses here)
- texture (ie hair) and light foreground - background separation could need a touch up (too dark, different contrast spread?)
- the framing is cut tight and well and rises questions if looked at often enough, it does not support balance neither does it add dynamics
2
- as 1 with little (secondary?) retouches (did not spend as much time with this as with 1 and 3)
Picking hairs my personal impression would be that she did not perceive the light the same way as armando did - they were good but not perfectly connected in this scene.
Scene presentation, framing and BW presentation are good especially in 3.
