Hello, all.
Thank you for your replies. I appreciate any advice that makes me a better photographer!
Since there were a number of questions on focus, I'll answer that first. I was using a manual focus lens set at 1.8 while holding a reflector, so after focusing initially I just leaned my body to correct it. I was using focus peaking but for some reason, it just wouldn't light up around her eyes. I resorted to holding down the shutter release while rocking back and forth a bit. Despite the soft focus on the near eye, in my opinion, this frame was the best compromise across various considerations. One day I may pay for an autofocus 85mm but for now, I like my old lens. It was used by a photographer at the LA Times and is engraved with the paper's name. I kind of enjoy that
Yes, those are contact lenses she is wearing. The thing that looks like an earphone cable is actually an earring.
Since this photo was taken I've been improving a bit on my processing of street portraits in terms of keeping detail in shadow/dark areas. I think I just went a little too far with contrast, etc., and lost hair detail. I may revisit that.
Thanks again to all of you for offering your insights.
Best,
Jeremy