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rosko

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Mineral still life.
« on: January 02, 2016, 23:57:38 »
I would like to submit my image to you critic. Cheers.

Broken glasses on a slab of slate. B&W version, but slight diff. with the original.

Df + 24-105mm f/4 Sigma art.

# @105mm;

# 100 isos

# f/10

# 1/60 sec.

Natural light from left side + white screen right side.

Francis Devrainne

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Re: Mineral still life.
« Reply #1 on: January 03, 2016, 01:08:05 »
Tonally I think your B&W conversion looks good. The lighting could perhaps be a bit more dramatic. The highlights in the glasses are a bit erratic but that sort of goes along with concept, it might be worth exploring different highlighting though also. I find the framing/composition unbalanced, did you try any close up versions? I think getting closer to where the edges of the broken glass was starting to go outside of the frame of view would have stronger impact.

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Re: Mineral still life.
« Reply #2 on: January 03, 2016, 01:27:00 »
Francis, I am not very good at this, but here it is :)
I am terrible at processing BWs but you seem to have done a good job!
It is sharp. Well lit. No shadows.
You might have pumped up the contrast a bit and by doing so burned the highlights?
My main concern is the background. The glasses don't pop out of the image, but blend in.
And, I agree with Charlie, the viewer wants a closer look of the damage :)

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Re: Mineral still life.
« Reply #3 on: January 03, 2016, 01:40:54 »
Charlie and Jakov, thanks for commenting.

I agree about the lightings and and I know that a textured background it is not best probably due the glass transparency.

I try to light my subjects only with natural light and reflective screens to eliminate the shadows.

@ Charlie : no, I didn't try to make a close up version. I can re-frame the image in this order at the sharpness' detriment.

Cheers, Francis.
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Re: Mineral still life.
« Reply #4 on: January 03, 2016, 13:27:36 »
Well done. To bring out the glass more, you could either "shape" the highlights, e.g. in a line, or make them specular. Further you could give the glass more definition by replacing the white screen on the right side with a black one.

I also am of the (humble) opinion that the composition would improve if you'd come closer.
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Re: Mineral still life.
« Reply #5 on: January 03, 2016, 14:15:53 »
Thank you, Hans.

Interesting suggestion, as I have never used black screen so far. I keep that in mind for the next ''essay''.

Will post a crop (glasses were discarded!) ;)
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Re: Mineral still life.
« Reply #6 on: January 03, 2016, 14:17:05 »
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