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Images => People, Portraits, Street, PJ & Cityscapes => Topic started by: Akira on February 25, 2017, 07:02:06

Title: Broken rhythm
Post by: Akira on February 25, 2017, 07:02:06
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Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Thomas G on February 25, 2017, 09:19:35
Cool syncopation.Nice sky light and blue hue. Buildings are nice by themselves, as well as the clouds. All together they make a great moment.
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Thomas Stellwag on February 25, 2017, 09:34:47
reading from right to left it is a waltz
I like the composition and idea
seeing the title I expected a damaged guitar  :)
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Erik Lund on February 25, 2017, 14:17:53
Nicely seen and captured!
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Akira on February 25, 2017, 17:20:26
Thank you, all, for kind comments!

At first, I liked these particular clouds and also other surrounding ones at first and wanted to do stitching pano.  But I didn't like the way the potential lower part (the houses and building) would appear.  So, I decided to concentrate on these clouds and thought it interesting to add what I saw on top of the roof.  I'm glad you like the result!
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Anthony on February 25, 2017, 17:31:25
Very attractive composition and colours.
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: rosko on February 25, 2017, 17:41:25
Very well done, Akira ! :)

There is serenity in this image.

I am wondering if making the buildings' bottom lines parallel to the bottom of the image wouldn't improve the compo ?

Thanks for sharing,

Francis.

Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Akira on February 25, 2017, 17:59:23
Thanks, Anthony!

Francis, I appreciate and understand your suggestion.

The rooftop of the building was not parallel to the camera (the left side was way further than the right side).  So, correcting the bottom of the parts covered with the yellow tiles to parallel to the bottom of the image would make the whole perspective of the building awkward.  Also, the posted image is the entire frame.  Any perspective correction or rotation would trim these essential parts of the image.  Personally I don't feel the perspective of the building awkward as it is.
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Jakov Minić on February 25, 2017, 19:01:12
Jazzy, Mr Cloud!
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Thomas G on February 25, 2017, 19:01:32
Thanks, Anthony!

Francis, I appreciate and understand your suggestion.

The rooftop of the building was not parallel to the camera (the left side was way further than the right side).  So, correcting the bottom of the parts covered with the yellow tiles to parallel to the bottom of the image would make the whole perspective of the building awkward.  Also, the posted image is the entire frame.  Any perspective correction or rotation would trim these essential parts of the image.  Personally I don't feel the perspective of the building awkward as it is.
I think it could use a little rotation counter clockwise which would deal with the sligtly tilted impression.
My usual way for a first try would be to make the center vertical line of the middle building go real straight up or even a bit beyound.
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Akira on February 25, 2017, 19:34:10
Thanks, Jakov!  Yes, as Thomas G pointed out, the rhythm is a bit syncopated.

Now that I received suggestions from Francis and Thomas G, I tried to tilt the image.  The framing might be a bit too tight.  How about this?
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: David H. Hartman on February 25, 2017, 19:43:00
The both look good to me. I like the second one better.

Dave
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Thomas G on February 25, 2017, 20:14:40
Second one is even better.
If you are in doubt about the framing: push it as far as possible down and right.
With -0.85° i was able to just get the pole base and the white dot on the bottom left and still some room on the right. (which I did for myself before posting the hint).
You seem to have rotated more, which leaves less room. It's now to personal taste to find a compromise ...
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: David Paterson on February 25, 2017, 23:37:44
I love this. It is a very formal picture, and at first glance, very simple though actually there is a lot going on. The main structure is four thirds; however the line of three clouds has one outlier; the line of three buildings has an extra (the gantry); that beautiful, perfect blue is set against the rich yellow of the buildings - blue versus yellow - opposites in the rgb/ryb colour model; the light airy clouds are contrasted with the solid rectangular architecture . . . and so on.

There was mention of rhythm and syncopation; when learning to play drums one of the first things to be mastered is to play three beats with one hand and in the same time four beats with the other hand. This image is a virtual diagram of how to do it.
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: rosko on February 26, 2017, 00:33:09
I would prefer the  second one too : more balance is now given to the compo. as well as the graphics.

And as Dave pointed out, the duality of colours (blue/yellow) works very well. 8)
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Akira on February 26, 2017, 01:48:47
Thomas, thanks for the additional suggestion.  The 0.85 degree rotation seems to be the better compromise.  Here is the "0.85" version.
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Akira on February 26, 2017, 01:51:41
Dave, glad you like it.  Also, thanks for the analysis.  That is exactly how I felt.  It is a nice surprise that you played drums.  Considering that I feel some sort of rhythmic elements from your images in general, that makes a lot of sense.

Francis, thanks for looking again.  Hope you would look the third image...
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: armando_m on February 26, 2017, 05:16:58
musical notes
imagine if it had wires in the foreground :)
Title: Re: Broken rhythm
Post by: Akira on February 26, 2017, 13:07:12
musical notes
imagine if it had wires in the foreground :)

Maybe the music is more free without the wires?  :)