NikonGear'23
Images => Critique => Topic started by: rosko on January 02, 2016, 23:57:38
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I would like to submit my image to you critic. Cheers.
Broken glasses on a slab of slate. B&W version, but slight diff. with the original.
Df + 24-105mm f/4 Sigma art.
# @105mm;
# 100 isos
# f/10
# 1/60 sec.
Natural light from left side + white screen right side.
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Tonally I think your B&W conversion looks good. The lighting could perhaps be a bit more dramatic. The highlights in the glasses are a bit erratic but that sort of goes along with concept, it might be worth exploring different highlighting though also. I find the framing/composition unbalanced, did you try any close up versions? I think getting closer to where the edges of the broken glass was starting to go outside of the frame of view would have stronger impact.
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Francis, I am not very good at this, but here it is :)
I am terrible at processing BWs but you seem to have done a good job!
It is sharp. Well lit. No shadows.
You might have pumped up the contrast a bit and by doing so burned the highlights?
My main concern is the background. The glasses don't pop out of the image, but blend in.
And, I agree with Charlie, the viewer wants a closer look of the damage :)
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Charlie and Jakov, thanks for commenting.
I agree about the lightings and and I know that a textured background it is not best probably due the glass transparency.
I try to light my subjects only with natural light and reflective screens to eliminate the shadows.
@ Charlie : no, I didn't try to make a close up version. I can re-frame the image in this order at the sharpness' detriment.
Cheers, Francis.
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Well done. To bring out the glass more, you could either "shape" the highlights, e.g. in a line, or make them specular. Further you could give the glass more definition by replacing the white screen on the right side with a black one.
I also am of the (humble) opinion that the composition would improve if you'd come closer.
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Thank you, Hans.
Interesting suggestion, as I have never used black screen so far. I keep that in mind for the next ''essay''.
Will post a crop (glasses were discarded!) ;)
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