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« Reply #15 on: November 25, 2018, 17:12:58 »
The number syllables Gary mentions doesnt correspond with Akira's haiku,
So whatsup here?

We both said the syllables go:
1) 5
2) 7
5) 5

We just said it differently.
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« Reply #16 on: November 25, 2018, 17:14:30 »


Peck become Douglas,
Reviewing Script Between Scenes.
On a Battleship.
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« Reply #17 on: November 25, 2018, 17:19:47 »
I'll give it a try ...  :-\

Silent frozen trees   
Gazing out of the window
The sound of snowflakes

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« Reply #18 on: November 25, 2018, 17:34:40 »
Soft breeze at sunrise
Lifts ospreys to the heavens
Many fish will die

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Re: Haiku - Add Yours
« Reply #19 on: November 25, 2018, 18:21:04 »
I never got Haiku
It just wouldn't work for me
I leave it to you




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« Reply #20 on: November 25, 2018, 19:25:46 »
Gary, thank you for starting a intriguing thread!

Unfortunately I won't be able to post any until December 7th or so because my D750 is under repair now due to its release button issue.   :o :o :o

I'm enjoying the posts not only because of the images but also because of the various interpretations of "haiku".

Strictly speaking, "haiku" is three lines but the lines should basically consist of five, seven and five syllables respectively.  But, of course, that is only possible with Japanese for the poem to make any sense.

Thank you for indulging us to explore your culture.  (FYI- images are optional ... but as this is a photo driven site, it is nice to include a photo with the haiku.)
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« Reply #21 on: November 26, 2018, 02:21:12 »
We both said the syllables go:
1) 5
2) 7
5) 5

We just said it differently.

Yes, Gary's initial explanation is correct.

People should bear in mind that the format of haiku is based on the Japanese language.  This is an example of 5-7-5-syllable format (in fact, this is one of the best-known haiku by Basho Matsuo):

Furuike ya (5)
Kawazu Tobikomu (7)
Mizu no oto (5)

Meaning (according to my translation):
I see an old pond
Into which a frog jumps
Leaving the sound from the water

With the exceptsion of "n", every Japanese syllable consists of either the combination of one consonant and one vowel in this order, or one vowel.  The "n" is not a vowel, but is counted as a syllable.

Haiku is the shortest and simplest form of Japanese poetry, and its trick is how much information and feeling the poet can put into each word in order to create the deepest and widest possible world and sensitivity to convey.

Interestingly and brilliantly, Gary pointed out that the lines of haiku rarely rhyme.  That is probably because of the characteristics of the Japanese language and its words.  Around 60 years ago, some of the most progressive Japanese poets tried to create Japanese poems according to the English sonnet format where the rhyming plays a significant role.  But it turned out to be just impractical, and they found that the Japanese language was not made for that.
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« Reply #22 on: November 26, 2018, 03:50:52 »
The number syllables Gary mentions doesnt correspond with Akira's haiku,
So whatsup here?

They both say 5, 7, 5 so no disagreement there.

The syllable count is important in Japanese, but some people in English language poetry think the spirit of haiku is more important.

The structure of the lines is most critical. One simple pattern is to have the first two lines set up a subject and the third line will contrast or comment, or surprise. There are other patterns as well.

Finding an image which matches that structure could be a challenge. I like to think that some of my photos make that sort of commentary or surprise, but maybe Iím imagining Iím better than I am.


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« Reply #23 on: November 26, 2018, 22:36:35 »
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Early Morning Race,
Colors the Still Foggy Skies.
A Quiet Prevails.

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« Reply #24 on: November 27, 2018, 00:36:11 »
Gary, your three balloon image really works for me and so does its Haiku. 

My wife kindly gave me a balloon ride for my 60th birthday present some years ago.  The ride lasted just over an hour and we did around 30km cross country early in the day.  It is indeed quiet up in the air as the balloon moves along with the air - just an occassional noise from the burner as the pilot adjusts height.  A great platform to observe the animals waking up in the morning and country as one floats along.  ;D

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« Reply #25 on: November 27, 2018, 03:03:15 »
I'm with Akira, Haiku is best suited for the Japanese language. YMMV
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« Reply #26 on: November 27, 2018, 17:50:48 »
Grass bows in the wind
Kneels in extreme corners
Unbreakable green

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« Reply #27 on: November 27, 2018, 18:06:40 »
@John. Totally love this, picture and text.
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« Reply #28 on: November 27, 2018, 18:08:24 »
The giant sits
He cries a puddle
beware of his rising
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« Reply #29 on: November 29, 2018, 08:53:44 »
Where are you, folks? I did not mean to scare you off with my darkish contribution. It is not all flower power in life isn't it?
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